"It was murder I tell you!" Yelled Ralph. I tried to come for a reason to rationalize what we had done. "It wasn't murder," I replied. I told him we were all scared and that made us do it. I SHUDDERED at the thought of Simon laying in the sand face down in a puddle of blood.
"I wasn't scared," said Ralph.
"We were all scared,"I yelled franticly, GESTICULATING as I talked.
We decided that we weren't going to tell the twins about our involvement in last nights dance. Soon after our decision had been made they trotted out of the forest in unison. I rushed over to talk to them and I could see some scratches on their faces indicating that they had been there last night. Nobody talked about it too much because it was so depressing. We decided that we should restart the signal fire and spent most of the rest of the day collecting wood. Unfortunately I couldn't help on account of my asthma. It always made me feel bad that I couldn't contribute to the fire, but my glasses did start it so I guess that was enough. Later on in the day we went to get some fruit and then sat around by the fire eating it. It was almost dark and I stifled a yawn.
"We should get to bed," I said.
So we went to bed and all of fell asleep almost right away. Later on in the night we heard a noise outside and all of were scared thinking it might be the beast. When it began to speak to me I freaked out and began to hyperventalate. Then the whole hut crashed down on us and I was smothered by pieces of wood and leaves. Ralph was on top of something slamming his fists in to it. Then someone came out of nowhere and grabbed my specs right off my face and ran away. There was nothing I could do but lay there because of my asthma. I was still breathing heavily when the picked me up and sat me up against a tree.
Off in the distance I could see three figures off in the distance running down the beach. The waves crashed near them and the mood made it look like there were Phospherescent colors.
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3 comments:
I like how you used all the vocabulary in the right tense. also I like how you talk about piggy's asthma
I like this sentence right here"I SHUDDERED at the thought of Simon laying in the sand face down in a puddle of blood."
I can really picture Simon laying in bloody sand.
Good job.
I like how you used dialouge in the blog prompt since not many people use it, and how you used it with things that happened in the story like "It was murder I tell you!" and "It wasn't murder," since that was actually used in the story. You used all the words correctly and it was really good.
you spelled hyperventalate wong it is spelled hyperventilate :)
and i liked when you said that piggy could Imagine simon laying there in a puddle of blood
i could tell that ralph was kind of crazy in the begining because he said "It was murder I tell you!" Yelled Ralph."
and then piggy was like it wasnt murder and he is right
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